WARNING: The truth is that I always do the content of my paper first before I do the intro and the conclusion. I feel as if the intro is one of the tougher parts of the essay, so I leave it alone until when I actually need it. If the intro feels jumbled up, then I am truly sorry. I apologize for giving you guys something so crappy to read (cause I know that you guys deserve better). Because Bollywood is such a diverse topic, it is hard to narrow down on the specifics points to use in this essay. I plan to encompass all of Bollywood in this essay, because I enjoy it from the bottom of my heart.
Ever wonder how the term "Bollywood" came to be? It's a simple matter really. Just take the word "Hollywood" then take the biggest city in India, which is Bombay, then mash the words together, and violà, out comes "Bollywood", but unlike its Hollywood counterpart, Bollywood is not a real place, but rather, it is a representation of Hindi films, especially popular Hindi movies. What sets Bollywood apart from other cinema industries are that its movies are filled with heartfelt music and colorful dance sequences. Although the concept of cinema came from the West, this idea has evolved as a parallel culture in India. This culture can be traced from 1913 till present day as the culture of the world keep changing. The evolution of Bollywood cinema can be seen through what the people valued most during that particular time period, which can be seen through the dancing, music and plot of the movie itself.
I think this will be an interesting topic as it appears to have a various complexities to it regarding the context of Bollywood cinema and its relation with the Western idea of cinema. I would work a little more on the thesis statement, but as you said this is only the draft. Everything else seems good!
ReplyDeleteMaisha, you know: I HAVE wondered about the origin of the term Bollywood, so this opening is useful to orient the audience to the topic under consideration. (Please watch the wordiness of the opening sentence and revise to avoid a run-on.)
ReplyDeleteAs you indicated in your disclaimer, I know that the thesis needs to be based upon the discussion under consideration, which might be challenging if you write that content before writing the introduction.
That being said, I sense that your thesis can be strengthened. It notes what you'll cover in terms of Bollywood values -- dancing, music, plot -- but it doesn't make a real claim about how these elements shifting in this 100-year period of Bollywood, or why this shift is significant in terms. Aim to make a stronger claim to identify the shift and its significance, and it'll guide your essay well.
Hope this helps!